REVISION Fast Fashion

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    REVISION Fast Fashion

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    REVISION
    11/28
    After completing the 1st part of 2,500 words. pls ask the writer to continue the next part of 2,500 words for the next week submission thank you.

    11/29/2017
    Hi team.
    Thank you for your email.
    The writer is good but can offer more commentary on the references used & organised the paragraph/sentences to avoid repeats.

    The referencing format is wrong, the writer did not followed the Level 6 format according to the study skills guide book uploaded.
    The professor is very harsh marking on format & have zero tolerance if the format are not followed properly. Please request writer to pay special attention to follow the format required otherwise I will failed & put more effort to help me achieved a first class standard A grade as this is my resubmission paper.

    Please quickly upload the final version draft of 2500 words as I am required to meet the Professor this morning. I have to submit the completed paper of 6200 words to the Professor by the deadline.
    Thank you for your kind understanding.

    12/4/17 6.29 AM
    feedback
    Hi team
    I have urgently posted the Professor's notes & uploaded the correct dissertation template for the writer to follow in order for the writer to be on the right track but everything remains unchanged. The draft 2 remains the same as draft 1.
    I have requested a top writer for a fashion dissertation paper not a business paper.
    Kindly draw the writer attention to start over the paper according to the attachment, Professor notes & using the correct template.
    A link has been provided in the attachment to give an overview how the paper looks like.

    Notes from the Professor to follow :-

    Chapter 1: Introduction (What is fast fashion? What are the issues?)

    – Explain what you will do in this essay

    Chapter 2: Background research (History, Critiques, Theories)

    Chapter 3: Apply to case study 1 (i.e. how many seasons, fast fashion)

    Chapter 4: Apply to case study 2 (Negative Consequences i.e. labour, environment)

    Chapter 5: Conclusion.

    Agreed Action

    Chapter outline: what you will do in each chapter + what sources you primary will use.

    : Think about primary research.
    check file attached

    12/11/2017 12:28 AM
    Please find in the attachment the list of amendments/instructions required by the Professor.
    As the professor has zero tolerance on omissions and errors, kindly draw the writer's attention to amend the paper properly according to the instructions given in the attachment.
    Thank you for your understanding & prompt action.

    12/13/17 10:08 pm
    I need your help urgently to get the writer to respond to my latest message urgently as I have a meeting with the Professor shortly. The writer has forgotten to add the references at the end of the referencing page.
    I received the draft very late & I don't have enough time to check but I will do it later.
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    I want the writer to provide the missing information asap. I already look bad infront of the Professor by showing a business paper.

    12/14/117 5 AM
    The writer did not reference a lot of sections.
    Chapter 2 History & Theories have no reference & the whole of Chapter 3.
    so much damage done when I presented a business paper.
    I received warnings due to this.
    If the writer knows the work, I will not faced these issues.

    How many times I have to remind this is not a business paper.
    If the writer knows the paper. I don't even need to tell him the format is wrong, there are no references in sections……. & references does not appear at the end.
    05:50
    I am asking for a writer to help me solve the problem not giving more problems.

    12/18/2017 7:42AM
    Feedback in MS

    12/21/17 9.00 AM
    Kindly inform the writer whatever he is writing please add reference.
    I attached herewith the checked new draft for the writer urgent action.
    Please tell the writer to use website 'citethisforme' for references as there is not much time left.
    Thank you.
    check the new file attached

    12/22/17 2 AM
    see attached file

    12/24/17 6:53 am
    check draft feedback attached

    12/27/2017 9:13 PM
    check the file '188621_final'
    12/29/2017
    12:19
    include few relatable pictures from reliable source & amend the abstract as well following the body of the text. Appreciate him to perfect the paper & not miss out anything from the feedback given as there is not much time left thanks. Also to keep the Total words count of the paper to 6100 words excluding the abstract.

    12/31/17 5:58 AM
    Dear Support Team
    The writer didn't do much with the latest revised paper. He only change the sentences and yet the referencing style is still wrong not according to Harvard style.
    I have provided a detailed easy to follow instruction in the previous feedback (copy attached) but the writer didn't look for articles and develop the idea. There is a lot of repetition and the words are empty not representing a wider meaning in the entire study. A lot of sentences could be shorter without using super long words to explain something. A lot of repetition of ideas and repetition of words such as moreover and as a result as if there is no other transition word available.
    The paper should have a flow but in this case it is structured as very independent of each section not showing any link.

    Please urgently asked the writer to amend accordingly to the detailed instructions provided and follow the attached referencing guide.

    Appreciate your urgent attention and response.

    Kind regards

    12/31/2017 7:46pm
    Chapter 5 no reference.
    The total word count.
    Don't repeat the same referencing.
    Referencing style wrong
    Abstract to align with body text after the whole paper is finish.
    The total word count to 6100
    Please amend according to the bullet points.

    1/1/2018 9:14PM:
    I forward herewith the feedback and referencing guide for the writer urgent attention and action. I appreciate the writer full support to amend the paper urgently according to the feedback.
    Kindly deliver the fully corrected paper a.s.a.p. to meet the deadline. Kindly be advised the entire paper must have a flow and link and not jumping from one topic to another. Please pay attention to the sections highlighted. I don't see the flow nor do I understand what the writer trying to say particularly Chapter 5 (Conclusion).
    Please look up for articles instead of rearranging the sentence, double check all the references & referencing style, amend abstract to follow the content of the entire paper after it is properly corrected. Are the pictures original from original book?
    The word count for each sections as follows –
    Intro – 900 words
    Chapter 2 – 2000 words
    Chapter 3 – 1250 words
    Chapter 4 – 1250 words
    Chapter 5 – 700 words

    Thank you in advance tor seriously address all the issues highlighted during this crucial moment.

    1/2/18 10:38 AM
    1)Chapter 1 – Introduction

    1.1 What Fast Fashion is.

    Fast fashion stores are not replenished and customers do not hesitate to buy fashion items before it gets out of fashion since they are not available for long in the market (Barnes and Lea-Greenwood 2006).

    This is the case for Zara but does not applies to all fast fashion retailers. Zara does not replenish their stock because their supply chain is agile. Its production is within Europe. The same cannot be said for many other fast fashion retailers who relies heavily on outsourcing production in Far East.

    2)Chapter 2 – 2.3 Cultures of Consumption

    Global consumption is increasingly becoming a relevant subject for fashion retailers and designers within the fashion industry (Bhardwaj and Fairhurst, 2010). International markets and free trade have provided a larger market base within which revenue can be derived (Hines and Bruce, 2007). However, there are ethical concerns that arise from the venture into various markets. Free trade, for example, is authorized and enhanced through the World Trade Organization (Hines and Bruce, 2007). However, fair trade has become a worldwide discourse because of the increased deflection of customers to ethical consumption. (Giesen, 2008).

    There is no flow & nothing related in the entire section about Cultures of consumption in fast fashion.

    The knock offs from High end to High street such as ZARA and H&M have capture many consumers who wish to be in trend in the fashion world.

    The lifespan of each garment from the high street doesnt last long due to its poor quality and deterioration easily, which cause consumerism to spend more to keep their wardrobe updated.

    3)2.5 Fashion Trends Influenced by Social Media and Magazines

    2.6 Global Trend

    Many fashion retailers such as the H & M companies are moving towards the sustainable production. (Fletcher, 2013).

    Many fast fashion retailers such as H&M are moving towards sustainable production through their Conscious Collection for instance.

    4)CHAPTER THREE: CASE STUDY 1

    3.1 Fashion Shaping Culture

    Fashion has influenced innovation within the society from the 1700s (TED Institute 2017). Not only did fashion inspire the creation of technologies which were used in the electrical and steam industry, it has also influenced social norms and values (TED Institute 2017). Through changes that occurred in the field, societal norms were questioned resulting in movements such as feminism which liberated women such as gender equality and social justice movements.

    From Technology to social movement, both are not related to Fast Fashion.

    Can add not just feminism, Zoot, Suit, Riot and Black Panther movement both play a big role in shaping the notion about culture and idea.

    5)3.3 Cheap and Fast

    Fast fashion consumers, however have no inclination to move towards ethical consumption and slow fashion, despite the knowledge of the environmental and social impacts of fast fashion (Giesen, 2008).

    All fast fashion consumers or Most fast fashion consumers.

    6)CHAPTER FOUR: NEGATIVE CONSEQUENCES

    4.1 Pollution and Environmental Degradation

    The garments given back to manufacturers cannot be put to meaningful use because of the low quality of materials which are used in their manufacture. The fashion companies can decide to open the fiber to fiber recycling which can replace the loop recycling process.

    Discovery of fibre to fibre recycling practiced by many retailers. There are other recycling strategy e.g cotton to cotton and etc. I have suggested fibre to fibre recycling as an example of strategy used by Fast Fashion retailers. Please do more research on this because just this sentence does not carry any weight at all.

    7)4.3 Rana Plaza incident

    Consumers also prefer to have knowledge of the impact that their consumer choices have on other peoples lives. However, oblivion does not dispute the existence of exploitation in the countries wherein the dresses are generated.

    Consumers demand transparency nowadays. Previously, it was concealed by organisations and media. Now it is known. More awareness has been created since Rana Plaza incident.

    The entire section is too short, please elaborate more about the effects of the high-risk accident. What happens after this incident? How did Fast Fashion retailers react? Did they partake in more CSR activities? Do they engage in sustainable practices? Answer is Yes, please give more details on this. While others fairly repetitive sentences and not bearing a lot of critical analysis in other section can be shorten.

    8)Chapter 5 needs referencing to support your point

    Google book Fast Fashion books

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=B5VkR1suw5w

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2sKSYnV1YyA

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RC3jVZneuns

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zRcb6GC7ZB8

    add points such as sustainability and recycling to relatable chapter i.e Chapter 3 & 4

    9)Chapter 3 is missing from The Table of Contents.

    10)Please double check all references & referencing style are in order.

    11)Please check word count Total 6100 words

    Chapter 1 Intro – 900 words

    Chapter 2 – 2000 words

    Chapter 3 – 1250 words

    Chapter 4 – 1250 words

    Chapter 5 Conclusion 700 words

    01/02/2018 16:39 PM: I have forwarded many times the very detailed feedback for the writer to properly fully amend the paper accordingly and until now nothing is done.
    When it is possible to have the fully corrected paper as I am in this crucial moment?

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    REVISION
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    Referencing of 60 books or more from Anthens Online Library, other websites or media.
    Urgent request to prepare 1st draft of 1000 words to be ready by the draft deadline
    Kindly follow Study Skills guidebook uploaded to meet university requirements.

    This is a resubmission dissertation special request for top writers from PhD/Masters degree level expert in Fashion/Cultural Studies from UK reputable university.
    To achieve First Class Standard A Grade (70% and above)
    Duration of 7weeks to work with writer till the final submission with unlimited amendments.

     

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